Talk:Barack Obama/Archive 1

This is an attempt to write an article on this candidate, Barack Obama. It attempts to be a biography, not a day to day account of his campaign, nor a campaign advertisement. Disclosure: I am a US citizen. I am not registered to either party as a voter. Larry Yount 21:58, 26 July 2007 (CDT)

Steve has complained (privately) that Richard reverted his edits without explanation. I agree that that is simply unacceptable, particularly in light of recent discussions. Well, as a very imperfect stopgap measure, here's what I've decided: Steve, feel free to redo your edits, if you want. Then, Richard may not touch them; others will have to do so, if they are flawed. If he does edit them, then tell me, and I will ban him from working on this article. --Larry Sanger 21:34, 10 January 2008 (CST)

Steve was the one who changed my edits. with, as you can see, no explanation on the talk page.Richard Jensen 21:48, 10 January 2008 (CST)

The facts are here:

1. http://en.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Barack_Obama&diff=100246909&oldid=100246908
2. http://en.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Barack_Obama&diff=100246910&oldid=100246909
3. http://en.citizendium.org/wiki?title=Barack_Obama&diff=100248705&oldid=100246914

On what Larry stated I could do, what I'm choosing is, "sometimes the polite way is to let the other person undo his or her own work, once a mistake is pointed out."

Stephen Ewen 22:22, 10 January 2008 (CST)

How about:

Obama, a charismatic speaker,[1] repeatedly criticized Clinton for her 2002 vote supporting war against Iraq, and for her alleged ties to lobbies and old-fashioned politics.

Warren Schudy 23:47, 10 January 2008 (CST)

I don't have any problem with the new text of Richard, as it seems clear that Clinton is part of the old way of doing politics in the USA. What I do have a problem with, is that Richard removed the improvements made to other parts of the text by Stephen. Please reinsert them, Richard, because they are needed. Martin Baldwin-Edwards 23:56, 10 January 2008 (CST)

I'm happy to restore Steve's innocuous changes. But let's get the rhetoric clear: elections are fought like wars and politicians attack each other, soi attack" is the correct term. see [1] Obama did not use words like "alleged" and to insert them in a paraphrase distorts his position. The theme of "change" versus "old politics" is basic to Obama's "Many Iowa voters have responded to Obama's message that he is a fresh face who can unite a polarized electorate and move the country away from what he calls the "same old" politics. at [2] CZ is not endorsing Obama's attacks, it is explaining them. Richard Jensen 00:12, 11 January 2008 (CST)

At least to my ear, "X attacked Y for Z" says not only that X said Y does Z, but also that Z is true. I suggested inserting "alleged" to remove the implication. Another way to fix it would be to use "X accused Y of Z" or something like that instead. Warren Schudy 00:30, 11 January 2008 (CST)

No, I don'e agree with either proposition, Warren. First, a political attack is a political attack -- regardless of its veracity. Secondly, this usage of the word "alleged" is a piece of legalistic nonsense, designed to allow people to report allegations of a criminal nature without being sued for it. If the allegations under consideration here were of that sort, I could agree, but they are not. We could end up with nonsenses like: "Clinton allegedly attacked Obama for allegedly being too clever..." There is no need for this legalese outside of allegations of a criminal or other serious nature. Martin Baldwin-Edwards 03:04, 11 January 2008 (CST)

It seems Richard reverted all of the edits (a bunch of Stephen's edits) between one of his edits and his next edit. Perhaps Richard is working on it in an external text editor and forgot to download Stephen's changes before making his own? Warren Schudy 00:18, 11 January 2008 (CST)

Not that anyone has asked me, but my opinion is that we should not be quoting anyone's rhetoric about anyone else during this campaign. I'll admit I'm a Hillary supporter, but I'm not going around trying to attack Obama. If we go down that route, it would be madness. Please, just stick to reporting the guy's background, and let the public press quote the rhetoric. Quoting rhetoric from years ago seems more justified, but anything that was spoken since the current presidential campaign began does not, in my opinion, belong in here. It would literally never, ever end.Pat Palmer 13:41, 16 January 2008 (CST)

law practice

I emailed the firm Miner, Barhill and Galland to ask them to verify our statement about his law work. Richard Jensen 00:32, 11 January 2008 (CST)

OK. I took it from Obama's online CV.I cannot imagine he would take any risks with an internet source for which he is responsible:-) Martin Baldwin-Edwards 02:58, 11 January 2008 (CST)

well there is an ambiguity. The firm does not list him on its webpage, which seems odd. Is he on the firm's payroll? I assume not, that his status is on hold.Richard Jensen 03:34, 11 January 2008 (CST)

I imagine so, too. Martin Baldwin-Edwards 04:10, 11 January 2008 (CST)

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As this article is the subject of apparently heated dispute, Larry as Editor-in-Chief has asked me to act as referee here as part of a trial of the process.

At present I intend to stand well back here. If there is any specific issue that needs my attention, please state it in a message on my Talk page.Gareth Leng 08:31, 11 January 2008 (CST)

If there is any heat here, to my mind it is more personalized than content-driven (although there are content issues involved). I am trying to mediate these in an informal way. Martin Baldwin-Edwards 10:59, 11 January 2008 (CST)

I don't intend to get involved unless there's a fundamental sticking pointGareth Leng 11:41, 11 January 2008 (CST)

It seems to me there's a slight pro-Obama bias in Barack Obama and Hillary Clinton. Note that Obama is my favorite front-runner. For example, both Barack Obama and Hillary Clinton discuss how Obama criticizes Clinton, but not the other way around. Warren Schudy 11:34, 11 January 2008 (CST)

Clearly, that should be remedied. I haven't looked at the Clinton article since she and hubby started attacking Obama :-)Martin Baldwin-Edwards 12:00, 11 January 2008 (CST)

very good point and I will fix it. Richard Jensen 14:46, 11 January 2008 (CST)

Reiterating my statement in a different section above, I think we should be careful to avoid trying to report on the ongoing campaign while it is occurring. Someone will always be offended. In my opinion, these articles should be restricted to a rather dry reporting of background facts for the time being, and they should be as neutral as the clear blue sky.Pat Palmer 13:44, 16 January 2008 (CST)

law firm will respond to CZ

10:23 PM 1/14/2008, Dear Dr. Jensen:

Thank you for contacting us. There are some inaccuracies in the proposed Obama entry listed below. We would like to get back to you in the next few days with corrections.

Jeff Cummings

Jeffrey I. Cummings Miner Barnhill & Galland

Richard Jensen 23:50, 14 January 2008 (CST)

Interesting.--Martin Baldwin-Edwards 01:27, 15 January 2008 (CST)

yeah, it was posted at 10:23 pm....they work their associates till midnight. Richard Jensen 01:42, 15 January 2008 (CST)

campaign reporting

I have consolidated the analysis of the presidential campaign tactics used so far in the section called "presidential campaign". I have also replaced what I considered to be "spin" words (i.e., implying either positive or negative traits) with less hot button words.Pat Palmer 19:58, 16 January 2008 (CST)

I notice that the "presidential campaign" section is almost an exact duplicate of the section by the same name on the Hillary Clinton article. Therefore, it makes sense, if this analysis must be in Citizendium at all, to move it all out to a separate article called something like "presidential primary (2008)". anybody want to tackle that?Pat Palmer 20:19, 16 January 2008 (CST)